"Yeah, and our mom kept telling us to not story too far from home because of all of the shady characters that were lingering around? Those were some good times." Gregor leaned back in his chair and closed his eyes envisioning the times when him and his sister lived on Earth with their mother. When their dad left, Jezebel Strike, their mom, became so depressed. Sarah and himself felt that they needed to take up some more responsibility and help their mother recover from a broken heart.
"What was the first thing we stormed off to kill after dad left and we saw how upset mom was? Was it the Elk or Eagle Face? I can never remember." A piece of bread flew through the air as Sarah tossed a chunk into her mouth.
"Oh! It was Elk! I remember because we thought mother was talking about an actual elk, but it was really just that giant dude that was terrorizing the neighboring city. They called him Elk because of his beard and the giant antlers he carried around as his weapons. When we got there, several of the people who lived there helped us out. I will never forget the look on his face as he ran after us around the town, through all of our traps. Remember how he went on forever it seemed? Ha! He thought he could beat us just because we were annoying little kids!"
"We were rather annoying weren't we? Yes, I do remember that! When he finally fell down dead all of the people cheered for us! I think that is where we realized that we were meant to take down the evil in this world." Sarah held her mug of wine in the air, clinking it with Gregor's.
"And then it was Eagle Face! Man, that chick and her gang of trouble makers was a hard run. I think that was the first time I broke a bone actually. It was when I got into a fight with Eagle Face's husband. It was so rewarding when we ripped the eagle feathers right out of those brat's heads! It was like they couldn't hardly function anymore without them! It was so weird..." Sarah went through a flashback to that time and realized they were actually probably Animal Spirits who had taken over the group's bodies.
Author's note: So this story is based off of Attack on Giant Elk and Great Eagle from the Native American unit. The original story was of a man who was sent to get rid of the enemies of mankind, which happened to be a giant elk and a group of great eagles. The man gets rid of the elk with help from the terrorized inhabitants and different colored spiders and their webs. To get rid of the eagles the man took out the parents and then hit the two young eagles over the head so that they could no longer grow to be giant brutes that caused problems. I kept the very basics of the original story, but changed the animals to actual people. I also tried to use the stories to give more of a background to the siblings' lives.
Source: Heterotrophic Organism
I read this unit as well this week. I wrote my story on a different part though. I think you did a great job of retelling this story. I like that you wrote this as the two siblings recalling the event. If I remember right this story was just about one boy that defeated the "monsters." So I like that you made it two siblings instead. Great Job!
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ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job with this retelling. I didn't read the original story, but I really liked your use of dialogue. I am always weary of using dialogue for some reason, but I think that you did it so well. It gave a lot of background information without being too wordy. Great job!
You might want to look at the first sentence in your second paragraph. I think it is funny that the mother’s name is Jezebel. The beginning of the story kind of reminds me of The Hunger Games, when the dad dies the mother becomes super depressed and the kids help her recover. A guy wielding antlers as weapons? That is terrifying. Haha. I was intrigued by this story and really want to read the original.
ReplyDeleteYou know, Gregor and Sarah have quite the interesting life. I cannot relate to the idea of becoming accustomed to killing people as a job at such a young age. I must admit that I enjoy how you use your Storytelling posts to add depth and backstory to your Storybook. If you're able to do all of that, I could see you as an author in the future!
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